CONGRATULATIONS! You made it through the first day of #ReVISIONweek! We hope you had some quality BIC (butt in chair), or SD (standing desk) time yesterday.
And now, get ready for Day 2!
Today’s post is by our very own Picture Book Mechanic. Lynne Marie is always offering a helping hand, sage writing wisdom, and industry support. Lynne is the author of many books as listed below, including her brand-new book Moldilocks and the 3 Scares — illustrated by David Rodriguez Lorenzo (Sterling, 2019), which is funny and adorable! We just know her tips will pave the way to fantastic revision work today!
So, let’s go!
By Lynne Marie
Think of your manuscript as a car.
Of course, you want to get your car out of the garage, up and running, and on that road to success where it may take you far!
But if your car is broken down or missing parts, it won’t run.
Don’t give up — most every problem is fixable.
Here’s What to Do
- Roll up your sleeves (be ready to work).
- Read the manual (read books on craft, books in the same genre).
- Inspect the body for problems from all directions (with open eyes and objectivity).
- Start the car and listen to what the car is telling you (read it aloud).
- Pass it by a formal inspection (critique group or paid critique).
- Make a list of concerns.
- One by one, start tinkering away.
Tinker Tid-bits
I critique a good amount of manuscripts per week, even per day. You would be surprised at how many have the same issues. So here are some important factors to consider as you revise.
- Is the chassis stable? (Is the Structure sound).
If not, try installing these components.
- Do you have a likeable, but flawed main character?
- Is the character a child, or a character with child-like qualities?
- Does the character have a compelling problem?
- Are the Character and Problem relatable to children?
- Is there little, if any, adult interference?
- Does the character attempt to solve his/her own problem?
- Do the attempts increase and are there emotional responses to the failures?
- Is there white space in the manuscript and room for the illustrator?
- Is there a deep, dark moment where all hope seems lost?
- Does the flaw, if possible, somehow play a part in the resolution?
- Is the resolution satisfying and a result of the character’s actions?
- Is it geared toward the right driver? (Age Group)
If not, get in touch with your 6-year- old self. With the exception of some “exceptions,” the main character is a child or has child-like qualities, so an adult POV, if any, should be minimal.
- Have you installed the right parts, or do you have extra parts installed that hamper the running? Have you used the right gas? (Language/Text)
Are you using active verbs (not passive like was/is/has/had/have, etc.) and strong nouns? Is it overly wordy? Are you describing things that should be left to the art? Are you stacking prepositional phrases and making sentences long and diluting the visual impact of them? Remember, less is more and you should always convey a line in as few words as possible.
If a line doesn’t speak to characterization or move the story forward, it usually isn’t right for the story (even if you think it’s a bright/shiny part). If the line doesn’t point anywhere, or veers off the path, you risk losing the reader. Every single line must prod the plot toward its final destination – a satisfying resolution.
This is just one way approach your revisions this week. I truly do hope that I have helped you to make your car (manuscript) run better and further than you ever thought it might!
Lynne Marie is the author of Hedgehog Goes to Kindergarten – illustrated by Anne Kennedy (Scholastic, 2011), Hedgehog’s 100th Day of School – illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Scholastic, January 2017), The Star of the Christmas Play — illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Beaming Books, 10/16/2018), Moldilocks and the 3 Scares — illustrated by David Rodriguez Lorenzo (Sterling, 2019) and her first non-fiction picture book, Let’s Eat! Mealtime Around the World — illustrated by Parwinder Singh (Beaming Books, 2019) and more forthcoming. She’s represented by Deborah Warren of East West Literary Agency. When she’s not cruising around the world, she lives on a lake in South Florida with her family, a Schipperke named Anakin and several resident water birds. She runs a Critique and Mentoring Service at www.ThePictureBookMechanic.com and is a Travel Agent at www.PixieVacations.com/Lynne. You can learn more about her at www.LiterallyLynneMarie.com.
Love the mechanic analogy! Got to work on my automotive skills for sure! Two other things that stood out for me – the need to leave white space and read your ms out loud! Thanks Lynne Marie!
So happy that something spoke to you. Best of luck as you put it to use!
Amazing! As always your insight is the best!!! I ADORE analogies and feel like I also learned a bit about cars😉
This is a perfect way to look at stories, no wonder you’re so great a critiquing! You see EVERYTHING!😍
So happy to hear from you and see that you were the winner in my The Picture Book Builders blog — you are always so supportive to us all. You deserve it!
Great advice! Thanks.
You are very welcome! Enjoy the process!
Vroom vroom! Love this analogy.
So happy to see you revving up your engine. You go, girl!
I love the analogy here! Hoping to rev my engines with these tips!
You can do it — if I did it, surely you can, too!
Great analogy! I especially like the tip that each line should develop the character or drive the plot forward. Thank you!
Yes, that is one of my personal favorites and likely one of the most helpful of all. Glad it spoke to you!
I absolutely love you advise. I hadn’t thought of it in terms of a car and how it runs and why it runs well. I’m printing this so I can refer back to it as I revise – thank you!
Awww, thank you for your kind comments. Enjoy and drive far!
Thanks, Lynne. Just got rid of a bright, shiny part in one of my stories that wasn’t moving things forward. May have a little funeral for it. 😉
LOL I feel your pain. Sometimes, a funeral helps! BTW there is this excellent, and so well done book. The end of something wonderful. I think we can apply it to our writing in some ways LOL
Great advice, and useful checklist! Thanks for the reminder that every line needs to move the story forward.
You are very welcome! It’s one that I personally rely upon. Happy reVISIONing!
Love the mechanic analogy! I’ve been fine-tuning like a fiend lately.
You go girl! That’s so wonderful to hear. Keep up the good work!
Love the analogy, Lynne Marie! Having the manual helps…but it’s important to have the hands on approach as well…and that’s what revision is all about. Thanks for a great post!
So nice to see you here, dear Vivian! Thanks for all you do for KidLit! Happy reVISIONing!
Love this analogy! I’ve got a lot of ‘cars’ parked in my garage waiting for some ‘work’ to be done. This is a great way to look at what they actually need. 🤞🏻🏎we’ll be racing soon!
LOL Yes, Kathy — you and me both! The best thing about Revision Week was that while sorting through all my cars and looking for which one to work on, I came across a few that needed less work than I remembered and they are now up and running!
Great tips for getting my manuscripts up and running. Thanks!
You’re very welcome! I do hope they work for you as well as they have for me. Happy revisioning!
I love the car metaphor! You are truly an awesome picture book mechanic!
Awww, it’s so nice to see my dear friend Melissa here! Thanks for your sweet comments. So happy to have you riding beside me in The Children’s Book Academy! XO
Returned to this a couple of times this week. I’ve made notes now. So many important points.
Thank you, Lynne.
You’re very welcome, Riya! Enjoy it and use it well.
Love this analogy and all of the advice. Your article certainly has revved up my engine to go revise. Thank you for sharing! I’m going to make this into a checklist.
So happy — from the sound of your engine, you should go far!
Love this checklist! I am near the end of a challenging R&R, and this is so helpful! Thank you!
OOOH, that’s exciting, Midge! I truly hope it helps! Good luck to you!
Perfect checklist for PB mechanics-in-training to become a mechanic like you, Lynne. I’m printing this off. TY.
Awww, thanks dear Kathy! Hope it helps you drive far!
Great post packed with sage advice, thanks Lynne Marie!
Awww, thank you for your kind words. Happy reVISIONing!
Ahh- you’ve boiled this down so simply and easily. Thanks for this great metaphor, Lynne. Sure is a helpful way to keep things in mind as I revise.
Thanks, Dea! I am so glad you enjoyed it!
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